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Marker's Comments:


 * Film Review / Speech

Students were to submit either the film review or the speech, regarding the study of Adam's Rib. It was pleasing to see that almost every student submitted a piece of work. Generally, students were able to address the question with clarity and provide some insights into the characters of the film.**

__Film points:__
 * Those who wrote the film review were able to structure their ideas clearly and on the whole, were able to comment a range of film features of the text.
 * It was good to see students use evaluative language that revealed the opinion of the reviewer. It would be advisable to create a wordbank of evaluative language as it was limited in scope in some responses.
 * It is important to refer to details of the text, though you do not need to give away the ending.

__Speech points:__
 * The majority of students wrote a speech and in the main, this was done quite well. It was disappointing to see a few incomplete responses. Some students only managed one or two paragraphs whereas other students were able to write at least a page. Classwork is designed to give you opportunities to show what you know, to organise your ideas and to develop your writing skills. If you do not take these opportunities, you effectively deny yourself the opportunity to improve your writing, to seek proper feedback and only leave yourself with assessment tasks as the time to make mistakes. This is a far riskier scenario and one that I would strongly urge you to avoid.**


 * Students structured the speech effectively. In particular, it was pleasing to read that all introductions were clear, established the purpose, audience and context for the speech. This was very reassuring to read!!
 * Students made some great references to the norms and values of the context. This was very good to see!
 * The authorial voice and confident tone was certainly in keeping with Amanda Bonner. You are to be congratulated on adopting a range of techniques to support this. This included a didactic tone (educative tone), assertive tone created through high modality, rhetorical devices such as rhetorical language.
 * Additionally, many speeches really engaged the responder through the use of second person pronouns - such as you and we. It created an inclusive environment.
 * Students need to include more textual detail from the film. This would serve to enhance your written responses and give them greater depth and detail.
 * It is crucial that you finish your response. This means that you need to write a conclusion, even if you haven't finished the body of your essay. ALWAYS CONCLUDE YOUR RESPONSE. If you don't, you will automatically miss out on any top marks, because all marking criteria, particularly in the top two bands, assumes you have structured your ideas well. This means including a conclusion.